Does this want to make you want to read more?

No. I don't think it's an attention grabber. The main reason for that is because it sound's like the starting of an boring essay you're about to give to a teacher. It's not memorable. It drawls on about that person's 'childhood' if you can call it that. It feels unrealistic. The thing I would consider you change is....that you make sure everything is in flow....It also kind of contradicts itself. Keep working on it it.